Jessica

Genre Story:

No Sympathy (Poem #1) : Dear Mister Reaper (Poem #2) :

Dear Jessi,

I REALLY liked your story Dear Mr. Reaper!!! It has so much extended meaning, making it a more interesting read. I esoescially liked the lines: "Dear Mister Reaper Watch me cry  As my dear brother  Must wave goodbye"

**These four lines alone provided so much emotion for the reader. They were extremely powerful! One thing I would maybe include a bit more of is characterization so that the reader knows what the brother is all about. Overall, amazing poem!**


 * Dear Jessica,**
 * I read your poem 'No Sympathy.' I really liked the idea of rebirth when you talked about living happily in the sea as opposed to on land, because it provides the reader with a vision of the freedom of the ocean. When you say "then if I'm lucky I'll have a purpose" it's such a simple way to put it, yet it's very open and shows that the speaker of the poem longs for more. One things I would reconsider is when you say "lil' ol' me" just because I feel like it interrupts the voice of the rest of the poem. Overall the poem is touching and I can relate to it, and I enjoyed your writing.**
 * Sincerely,**
 * Halli**