Jibin

Genre Story Genre story continued version: Not completely finished, still a work in progress ==

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Dear Jibin, Your poem 'Unknown to all' was very moving. At first, I wasn't exactly sure what you were getting at, but then it became clearer at the end. I liked the image of all the pills "filling you with heat" as if you took too many of them. I don't know if I would refer to those without depression as "regulars"; maybe you could find a word that fits a little better. Maybe you could elaborate a little more on the part where you talk about the small light of hope. What part is the light of hope? Show that more. The poem is a very deep piece and I'm glad you were so honest! Sincerely, Halli